Talk:Droste effect/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:48, 4 October 2021 (UTC)

Many thanks for taking this on. I'll have limited availability in next few days. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:05, 5 October 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• Do we need to link "art"?
  • No.

• "of mise en abyme, is" only mentioned in the lead, I don't expect to find material that only exists in the lead.
  • Fixed.

• "image's resolution allows.[2]" do we need that ref in the lead? I doubt it, I suspect it's covered in the main body, per WP:CITELEAD.
  • It is. Repositioned the ref.

• "The original 1904 Droste cacao..." cocoa? And this is a fragment so no full stop.
  • Fixed both.

• "only goes on as " only continues as
  • Done.

• "named for a " that feels a bit USENg, I would say "named after" but it's not a biggie.
  • Done.

• No need to pipelink Giotto.
  • Gone.

• "Stefaneschi Triptych" italics.
  • Done.

• According to that article, the 1320 date is uncertain, so is it worth making a direct claim here or perhaps "early 14th century"?
  • Done.

• "which depicts a gallery that depicts itself" can we use a different word for depict on one of these?
  • Done.

• "one of the main Dutch brands" ... "of cocoa".
  • See next.

• In fact, I'm not sure that's even required.
  • Gone.

• No need to link common words like nurse.
  • Gone.

• "household notion" what does that really mean here? household I get (in Holland I suppose alone) but "notion"?
  • Removed.

• "Reportedly" by whom?
  • Gone.

• " by Giotto in 1320, in his Stefaneschi Triptych" see comments above on the lead.
  • Fixed.

• "its center panel" are we definitely in USEng?
  • Fixed.

• "1320 Stefaneschi Triptych. In the central panel is the kneeling figure of Cardinal Stefaneschi .." both overlinked, italics apply, 1320 comment applies etc etc.
  • Fixed.

• "depicts a gallery containing a print which depicts" same again.
  • Fixed, but on the other hand, the repetition reflects the situation within the image, so I wonder...

• "Bart de Smit" since not notable, do we care?
  • Gone.

• No need to link butter.
  • Gone.

• Or cheese spread.
  • Gone.

• Could however link Russell Hoban.
  • Linked.

• "19 Jan 1918" January.
  • Done.

• "A model of Bourton-on-the-Water was" A model of the village was...
  • Done.

• "replica of Bourton-on-the-Water village" overlinked in the caption.
  • Gone.

• Ref 1 needs an un-spaced en-dash in the year range.
  • Fixed.

• Date format in the refs need to be consistent.
  • Fixed.

That's all I have. I enjoyed this at DYK and enjoyed it more here too. Take your time getting back to me, but feel free to ping me. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:25, 8 October 2021 (UTC)

The Rambling Man - all done to date. Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:51, 15 October 2021 (UTC)