Talk:Detroit News Orchestra/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 12:33, 10 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Am conducting this review as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 12:33, 10 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Lead

"The orchestra's broadcasts could be received across most of North America" - odd, it says in the prose half of North America. Which is correct?

The map in the article shows more than half. And if one was talking about population at the time, it would be way more. In fact, it shows that transmission extends well down into Central America. This is not a material distinction. Pick what you want. 7&6=thirteen (☎) 13:01, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done - corrected lead to read half way across North America. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:51, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Background

"sometimes referred to as the "little symphony,"" - by whom exactly? Do we know?

Here "The Detroit News Orchestra - American Radio History" (PDF). p. 22. Retrieved April 11, 2020.

Done - copy edited accordingly. -- Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:11, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"for churches, schools, and other non-profit organization as a public relations outreach to their listeners." - organizations

Done corrected. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:13, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Listers in Hawaii

"The transmission was received clearly at 6:30 P.M. local time in the Hawaiian Islands by A. F. Costa, the postmaster at Wailuku, Hawaii." - I think the mention of Hawaii at the end of this sentence is redundant since the Hawaiian Islands are mentioned earlier in this sentence.

Done - copy edit fix. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:22, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"over 4,400 miles (7,100 km) from Detroit." - more than?

Done - that was more than --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:23, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

References

The ISBNs of the sources are missing and it would be benefical if they were included

Fixed 7&6=thirteen (☎) 18:11, 10 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:39, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Good work on the article. Will put on hold to allow the nominator to address/respond to the queries raised above. MWright96 (talk) 13:43, 10 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: - addressed all issues. Can you take a look at it again. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:19, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Doug Coldwell: Have re-reviewed the article, I am happy with the changes and will promote the article to GA status. MWright96 (talk) 18:07, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]