Talk:ChuChu Rocket!/GA1
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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 12:16, 9 December 2017 (UTC)
Don't feel obligated but I'm looking for comments on my current peer review if you're interested. Freikorp (talk) 12:16, 9 December 2017 (UTC)
- Is it reasonably well written?
- "lead mice into their rockets" - the use of the word 'their' raises the question of why they have rockets, also it isn't clear at this stage what the rockets do (they could be a weapon to use on the cats), how about simply 'lead mice into escape rockets'? I'm open to alternate wording.
- I agree that's the best way to say it, fixed
- Wikilink Private server in the lead
- Done
- Wikilink sprites; non-gamers won't know what this means
- Done
- "He noted there are two trends" - this is his opinion. As per WP:WORDS i'd replace "noted" with "stated" or another neutral term
- I am bad about doing that, fixed
- Wikilink Wii U
- Done
- "hook up 4 Game Boy Advances" - '4' should be spelt out as 'four'
- Done
- "lead mice into their rockets" - the use of the word 'their' raises the question of why they have rockets, also it isn't clear at this stage what the rockets do (they could be a weapon to use on the cats), how about simply 'lead mice into escape rockets'? I'm open to alternate wording.
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. Has an appropriate reference section:
- There's inconsistency in the references. I.e some publications are spelt out (PlanetDreamcast) whereas others are given with the url (www.dreamcastlive.net, sega.jp). Replace the url formatted ones.
- Fixed url ones
- I'd format 'ChuChu Rocket! credits. Sega, 1999' with Template:Cite video game
- Done
- There's inconsistency in the references. I.e some publications are spelt out (PlanetDreamcast) whereas others are given with the url (www.dreamcastlive.net, sega.jp). Replace the url formatted ones.
- B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
- There's one [citation needed] tag. Obviously the preceding sentence needs to be cited or removed.
- I cannot find a source. I think the image stands fine on its own to explain this. Removed.
- There's one [citation needed] tag. Obviously the preceding sentence needs to be cited or removed.
- C. No original research:
- A. Has an appropriate reference section:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail: Looks pretty good overall. Placing on hold until issues are addressed. Freikorp (talk) 12:36, 9 December 2017 (UTC)
- @Freikorp: Responded TarkusABtalk 16:37, 9 December 2017 (UTC)
- Looks good. Happy for this to pass now. Freikorp (talk) 23:08, 9 December 2017 (UTC)
- @Freikorp: Responded TarkusABtalk 16:37, 9 December 2017 (UTC)
- Pass or Fail: Looks pretty good overall. Placing on hold until issues are addressed. Freikorp (talk) 12:36, 9 December 2017 (UTC)