Talk:Charles Tottenham, 8th Marquess of Ely/GA1

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Nominator: Roc0ast3r (talk · contribs) 02:39, 8 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 22:12, 8 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 22:12, 8 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The coat of arms images are appropriately tagged. Sources are reliable. Spotchecks (footnote numbers refer to this version):

FN 11 cites "they married on 28 December in the Chapel of the Royal Hospital Chelsea". Verified.
FN 12 cites "In 1965, Tottenham was second in line to become Marquess of Ely. Upon the death of Guy Alvo Greville Loftus, Tottenham became the heir apparent." Verified.
FN 3 cites "At the Royal Military College of Canada, Tottenham became an assistant librarian and French teacher. He soon worked as a translator at an insurance company before being employed as a language teacher at Trinity College School in Port Hope, Ontario." Verified, but why "soon"?
- Modified to "later". RONIN TALK 01:26, 9 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Spotcheck passes. I'll read through the content next and post any comments below. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 22:32, 8 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Earwig finds no issues. I just have one suggestion from a read-through:

Tottenham was entitled to sit in the House of Lords until 1999 because of his subsidiary title of Baron Loftus. I don't think a casual reader will understand that that means that the subsidiary title is not in the Peerage of Ireland. It's such a short article that you don't want a digression about this in the body of the article, but how about adding a footnote that explains that the lower title was in the Peerage of England?

The above is a minor point and I'm not going to hold up GA over it; up to you if you want to make that change. I'll go ahead and pass this now. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 10:47, 9 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! For your suggestion, I think that the current text explains that: In the Peerage of the United Kingdom, the Marquess of Ely is concurrently Baron Loftus, entitling the Marquess to a seat in the House of Lords. As a result, Tottenham sat in the House as Baron Loftus ..., but I agree that the sentence might not be the most clear. I went ahead and changed that sentence. RONIN TALK 15:40, 9 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]