Talk:Capital Bicycle Club/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Generalissima (talk · contribs) 16:44, 16 July 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 12:29, 21 August 2024 (UTC)

Hi, I'll be reviewing this article, very excited, great pictures. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 12:29, 21 August 2024 (UTC)

Prose and content

• Is there a reason the bicycle is called an "Ordinary" instead of "Penny-farthing"?
  • Sources about the history of cycling generally use the ordinary terminology when talking about it relative to other bicycle. You're right that I should at least mention the term Penny-farthing. - G
• held large number held a large number/held many
  • Fixed. - G
• equal-wheeled If you are using "Ordinary" bicycle instead of Penny farthing, some clarification on what is "equal" should be made here.
  • Corrected. - G
• the first introduction
  • Removed. - G
• Soon after the club's founding, the city had acquired a reputation as a "bicycler's paradise" due to its broad and smoothly-paved streets. in the lede it seems the reputation was gained due to the club, but here it seems incidental
  • Made this clearer in the lede. - G
• Use active voice for concision (and energy):

• members would participate in
• where riders would attempt

• • Done. - G
• gloss galop
• women riders female riders?
  • Fixed. - G

Suggestion

• Interest in cycling spread across the United States in the late 1870s reorder this clause to put the year first, to more immediately establish the context before jumping into a description.
  • Fixed. - G

Sources

• [1] clock Interested by a showcase of English bicycle designs at the 1876 Centennial Exposition I don't think this is true
• [4] Y
• [6] Y
• [8] clock "before or during the race"
  • Fixed. - G
• [9] Y
• [10] Y
• [12] Y
• [13] Y

Other

• Neutral Y
• No OR/COPYVIO Y 9.1% earwig, titles
• Stable Y
• Broad / summary style Y
• Images: All comfortable PD Y

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 12:29, 21 August 2024 (UTC)

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