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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 19:58, 16 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Happy to review the article.

And I'm happy that you decided to review it!! -- BhagyaMani (talk) 07:18, 17 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Assessment

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A few general points

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This is by all accounts a well written article with a wealth of interesting detail. I'm ashamed to say I knew very little about this animal before starting the review process!

  • ... Reginald Innes Pocock… —and other examples—you need to explain who these people are, e.g. '… the British zoologist Reginald Innes Pocock…'.
Done. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 23:14, 19 May 2020 (UTC) --[reply]
  • Alexander Sliwa comes across as a champion in this article and an authority on the subject - if he is, consider mentioning him by name in the text (e.g. using this or this).
He has been studying black-footed cats in South Africa for 25+ years. But since this page is about the cats, I prefer not to mention people, unless in regards to taxonomy, where it is standard to refer to species + subspecies authorities. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 23:14, 19 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Understood. Amitchell125 (talk) 06:35, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead section

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  • Link termite; vertebrates.
  • I've produced an SVG version of your distribution map (this), worth using in place of the current map? (It can amended as you see fit.)
Done both. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 23:15, 19 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Taxonomy…

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  • There a link for ref 7 (Johnson et al) here (free registration required).
The bibcode parameter in the reference leads to the same website. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks, missed that. Amitchell125 (talk) 06:49, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • …he described the skins… - amend to '...described the species using skins…' and put the link to Species description with the phrase described the species (or something similar).
Revised. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Litákun is spelt differently from the title of the article linked to it , any reason why it should be?
Well, this happens that the spelling of names changes in the course of more than a century. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Unlink nominate subspecies (already linked in the sentence).
Done. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Unlink million years ago (twice) unless the abbreviation is used (as it's a common term).
I'm afraid this is not possible, as the {{mya}} template automatically adds these links. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • The links to ...14.45 to 8.38..., ...16.76 to 6.46... etc. - seem to be external links (i.e. they don't lead to Wikipedia articles), so they I think they need to be treated as citations and put in the Reference section.
Above mentioned template leads to the respective sites that are part of the wikimedia tools. It is used on many many pages, and I think it's great, because it provides an instant overview of the time scale in question. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Understood. Amitchell125 (talk) 06:49, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • I would use miles in full, not mi (an unfamiliar unit for some readers).
These measurements are also provided with a little helper, the {{convert}} template, which I set to consistently show abbreviations of units. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Understood. Amitchell125 (talk) 06:49, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Characteristics…

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  • Add this to ref 12 (Guggisberg).
This ext link shows a book titled Doñana by J.A. Férnandez published in Spain. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
So it does, my apologies - I should have checked WorldCat first... :) Amitchell125 (talk) 07:45, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Done. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • ...smallest cat in Africa. - amend to 'smallest wild cat species in Africa' or something similar, as there are really small kittens out there.
Done. -- 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)BhagyaMani (talk)

Distribution…

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  • Link precipitation.
Done. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Behaviour…

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  • Ref 24 (Sliwa, Herbst, & Mills) can be downloaded from here.
This is perhaps available as a single chapter, I'll check. Above website provides download only for the whole book, 17+MB. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link pregnancy; inflammatory.
Done. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Move link to rodents where it first occurs (rodent den).
Done. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Unlink birds? (common term).
Done. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Consider linking kidney failure, not kidney.
Done. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Springbok have calves, not lambs.
Oops, in the cited sources the young of springbok are always called lambs. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I found several articles using 'lamb' (Bigalke1970, Van der Lugt & Kriek 1988, Skinner 1993, Hoffman et al. 2007), just to name a few. But 'calf' is also used, e.g. by Iverson et al. (1982), Coons et al. (2012). -- BhagyaMani (talk) 01:15, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, springbok are rams, ewes and lambs (Kruger National park, etc.), my apologies! I've added a citation to help others like myself falling into a similar trap. Amitchell125 (talk) 08:06, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
With your consent, I would much prefer to reference a WP:RS than a commercial website and an anonymous author. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 10:13, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Not a problem. Amitchell125 (talk) 14:17, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • ...the gerbil mouse (Malacothrix typica) being among its most important prey… - this sounds a bit on the vague side: what are the unnamed species more important than the gerbil mouse? Also, I think the term important needs clarification.
Will clarify asap. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:49, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • It apparently gets all the moisture it needs from its prey… - why 'apparently'?
Several radio-collared individuals were observed for many hundred hours, but none ever continuously for 24 hours a day all year through. Therefore, 'apparently' is appropriate. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:49, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Understood - a bit of clarification is needed so that the word is seen to be appropriate. Amitchell125 (talk) 08:06, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Threats

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  • The small size of this section is not generally encouraged, consider putting the text at the top of the next section, and renaming that as 'Threats and conservation'.

Conservation

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* Refs 43 (Burnette) and 44 (Waller) cannot be found (I don't think it's me).
I just checked: the links to the archived versions are working. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Same here! Amitchell125 (talk) 14:20, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link Wuppertal Zoo, not 'Wuppertal'.
Done. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Consider unlinking Studbook (it's written within a book title, and looks strange there imo).
Done. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • United Arab Emirates is the only nation to be linked in the article, any particular reason?
Perhaps one native editor placed this link once upon a time. I unlinked it. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

References

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  • Improve the information about Ref 20 'Atomic kitten' using this.
Sorry, I don't understand what you mean. This ext link leads to the reference section of a book, whereas Atomic kitten is the title of an article published in a magazine. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Apologies for not being clear, the page in the link provided a fuller citation. Now sorted.
Although these names are already linked in text ?? -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, it's generally done where the link exists (and has been found). Now sorted. Amitchell125 (talk) 14:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Red link Smithers, R. N. H. (Reay Smithers—red-linked elsewhere, so it's worth doing imo.
Done. -- BhagyaMani (talk) 00:31, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I'm putting the article on hold for a week. I'll tweak any spellings, etc., if I find any when I finally check things over. Amitchell125 (talk) 15:53, 19 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Passing

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Passing the article now, thank you for the great work you've done on the article. Amitchell125 (talk) 14:44, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

And I thank you for reviewing and passing it !! -- BhagyaMani (talk) 16:40, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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