Jump to content

Talk:Battle of Flores (1592)/GA1

Page contents not supported in other languages.
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

[edit]
GA toolbox
Reviewing

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Khanate General (talk · contribs) 14:52, 8 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

[edit]
  • "led by initially Walter Raleigh" "Initially" should be placed next to the verb "led".
  • "including the large Portuguese Carrack Madre de Deus which was captured after a long naval battle off Flores island" "Which" introduces a nonrestrictive clause and needs a comma.
  • "The expedition, particularly the capture of the great carrack was a huge success" The parenthetical phrase is missing a comma after "carrack".
  • "and subsequent arguments of share." The clause needs a verb, like "there were subsequent arguments".

General

[edit]
  • The toolbox shows that multiple links need to be disambiguated .
  • There are problems with the sources:
    • Pages should be abbreviated p. or pp. and not pg.
    • Many of the page numbers are also missing a period after the abbreviation.
    • Some of the references are malformed, like the "[[{{subst:date}}]]" in the Hakluyt reference
    • Why are there Spanish words in a list of English language sources? "págs. 59." in the Edwards references should be "pages".
    • This is a minor nitpick, but you should cite the 2004 updated Oxford DNB instead of the outdated 1885 one.
  • The article is in need of some major copyediting. There are several grammatical and MoS issues, just in the lead alone. Contact Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors.
  • File:Elizabeth1592.jpg is missing the copyright parameters.
Sorted some of this. ChrisWet (talk) 22:47, 21 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you. Could you list the changes that you've made below the comments in the bullet points? So that we can determine what still needs fixing.--Khanate General talk project mongol conquests 23:17, 21 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Sure:
  • Pages abbreviated to p.
  • Sorted malformed reference - Hakluyt.
  • Edwards reference - Spanish words removed & replaced.
  • File:Elizabeth1592.jpg now has the correct copyright parameter.
  • Improvements in the lead as pointed out.

Will work on some more later. ChrisWet (talk) 00:00, 22 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Has everything else been addressed? Wizardman 04:49, 27 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I have put in a request for Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors as this seems to be the only major problem left. If not, do tell what else there is. ChrisWet (talk) 11:40, 27 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Can the clarification needed tag be addressed? If so I'll pass this assuming good faith that the copyedit will finally get done (I did a skim look in the meantime) Wizardman 02:52, 22 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
The copyedit request is in January's backlog , what clarification tag are we on about here? ChrisWet (talk) 21:05, 22 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
There's a clarification tag in the second paragraph of Expedition, placed by User:MostRecentUser on 14 February.--Khanate General talk project mongol conquests 07:59, 23 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Complicated given the nature of a joint stock venture. ChrisWet (talk) 13:11, 23 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Passing now that the copyedit has (finally) been done. Wizardman 05:39, 2 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Devtools
Installation completed

Devtools is now enabled.

While getting ready, it missed the HTTP request for this page and related assets. Do you want to reload the page to start again?