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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:10, 25 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will get on with this now! --K. Peake 08:10, 25 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • The recording is not sourced as beginning in June 1992 in the body, nor is it as ending in May 1993
  • Only put (A & B) per Template:Infobox song on the studio parameter
  • The first para of the lead is out of order; place production as the seconds sentence, then release, followed by the Spanish language and ballad sentences
  • "The track is a" → "It is a"
  • "handled the track's production." → "handled the song's production."
  • ""Ayer" was released as" → "It was released as"
  • Move the music video sentence to being in the second para directly after commercial performance
  • "and was nominated" → "and were nominated" or mention which one if you can source it
  • Remove pipe on 1994 Lo Nuestro Awards
  • Move the critical reception sentence to being the last of the first para instead
  • Pipe 1994 Lo Nuestro Awards to Premio Lo Nuestro 1994 on the song of the year mention
  • "it became his eight number one song" → "it became Miguel's eighth number one song"

Background and composition

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  • Remove the comma before Romance
  • Are you sure there should be a comma before "and the United States" in this form of English?
  • If the quote about not trying more boleros is a full sentence, then place the punctuation inside quotes and add a comma after replied
  • "He began working with" → "The singer began working with"
  • "or sing in it"." → "or sing in it."" per MOS:QUOTE
  • "he decided to co-produce the album" → "the singer decided to co-produce it" to be less repetitive
  • The composed sentence feels like too much of a run-on; add a comma after Aries to help with this
  • "David Foster and Jeremy Lubbock's instrumental" → "Foster and Jeremy Lubbock's instrumental"
  • "from Foster's 1986" → "from the former's 1986"
  • ""Ayer" is a" → "It is a"

Promotion and reception

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  • Should there really be a comma before "and Gustavo Garzón"?
  • "the videos "takes you through the" → "the videos take one "through the" because this is referring to more than one
  • "each other intensely."" → "each other intensely"." per MOS:QUOTE
  • Either specify which video was nominated at the 6th Annual Lo Nuestro Awards or change to they were nominated
  • "On the review of album," → "In his review of the album,"
  • "called it a" → "called the song a"
  • Remove wikilink on Lo Nuestro Awards
  • "and as well as the inaugural" → "as well as the inaugural"
  • "Miguel's eight number one song" → "Miguel's eighth number one song"
  • Remove pipe on Billboard
  • "It was sixth best-performing" → "It was the sixth best-performing"

Personnel

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Performance credits

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  • Make this a sub-heading instead of a sub-section

Technical credits

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  • Same as above

Charts

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  • Good

See also

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  • Good

References

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Final comments and verdict

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@Kyle Peake:  Done Let me know how it looks now. Erick (talk) 03:48, 4 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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