Talk:2018 United States Grand Prix/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:07, 19 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Giraffer (talk · contribs) 21:14, 9 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 21:44, 17 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Links

Refs checked - 2,3, 29 and 40. Seems fine on spotcheck. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:12, 17 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose

Lede

at the Circuit of the Americas near Austin, Texas - wait is it not in Austin? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:46, 17 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done. It was.
It served as the eighteenth round of the 2018 Formula One World Championship and marked the forty-eighth running of the United States Grand Prix, the fortieth time that the race ran as a World Championship event, and the seventh time that it was held at this circuit. - this is a bit of a run-on. I think to the uniniciated, they wouldn't know that the US race was on different circuits. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:48, 17 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Cut the bit about being the 48th US GP and the 40th running of the US GP, since that's largely just trivia.

General

Even if you link something in the lede, it should also be linked in the body on first usage. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:55, 17 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Giraffer (talk) 16:32, 19 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
having won every race at the track since it joined the calendar but one—the 2013 event, won by Sebastian Vettel - sensationalism. Just say they won four out of five or whatever. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:56, 17 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done, reworded. Giraffer (talk) 16:32, 19 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Mercedes were the dominant constructor at the circuit, with an ongoing streak of four consecutive wins. - isn't this a given? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:05, 17 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Yep, removed. I got confused with the championship—confusingly, a championship winning constructor is the team who's drivers earned the most points over the season, but a race winning constructor is not the team that scored the most points that race. It's just automatically the team of the winning driver. Giraffer (talk) 16:51, 19 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, it's a bit of a misnomer Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:06, 19 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
FP3 was the only practice session of the weekend during which all race drivers set lap times.^{[citation needed]} Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:06, 17 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done, cited the official FP3 timing sheet. Giraffer (talk) 16:32, 19 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Overall, article is really well written. Mostly me being picky here. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 22:11, 17 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:44, 17 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Lee Vilenski, thank you for the speedy review! I've responded to all your comments. I'm frustratingly short on free time these next few weeks so I probably don't have time to review a GAN of yours now, but I will try to see if I can get to one later. I've never reviewed a GAN, but this is my third nomination, so I think I finally have a decent enough grasp of the process to try my hand at reviewing. Giraffer (talk) 16:55, 19 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.