Talk:1920 Croatian Peasant Rebellion/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Z1720 (talk) 02:33, 14 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Z1720 (talk · contribs) 02:37, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Setting up review. Comments coming soon. Z1720 (talk) 02:37, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments about the prose:

"and the brutally suppressed 1918 protest in Zagreb." I'm not sure if "brutally" adheres to NPOV, due to its negative conotations. Is there another adjective that can be used?
- Rephrased to avoid the particular term (T)
"rallies in its support were banned and its leader Stjepan Radić was arrested in March 1919, and imprisoned for almost a year." The phrasing at the end is a little weird. Maybe remove the comma after 1919? Or rephrase the end of the sentence?
- Comma removed (T)
"failing to distinguish between the HPSS's anti-militarism and the Bolshevism associated with the soldiers returning from Russian captivity in 1919, and mutinies in Maribor, Varaždin, and Osijek." I'm not sure where the distinctions are to be because of the phrasing. Is there another way this can be worded?
- Rephrased to make clearer. Could you please have another look? (T)
"in the Yugoslav colonisation of Kosovo, and arbitrary beatings by army" Remove comma before and
- Removed (T)
"Branding campaign" The first sentence in this section is too long and should be split into two.
- Split as suggested (T)
"There were rumours "Serbs will..." -> "There were rumours that "Serbs will..."
- Addded the missing "that" (T)
"By 10 September 1920, the rebellion was ended, except in the areas around Sisak, especially near Letovanić, where fighting ended two days later." Reword: too many commas
- Rephrased. Could you please take another look? (T)

Source review:

No concerns from earwig
Refs verified: 3, 10, 11. The rest are either behind paywalls or in non-English languages.
No issues with formatting.

Image review:

Licences good
Captions are good.
Recommend alt text, per MOS:ALT

I'll put this on hold. Please ping me when the above are addressed. Z1720 (talk) 03:11, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Z1720, thank you for your review. I believe I have addressed the issues raised above. Could you please take a look at the changes?--Tomobe03 (talk) 23:31, 13 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

My concerns have been addressed. I think this is a good article. I recommend that this be considered for WP:FAC, as it is well researched and I think is close to meeting those criteria. Z1720 (talk) 02:32, 14 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.