Talk:Álmos/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 18:53, 31 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be glad to take this one. I hope to have comments posted in the next few hours. Thanks as always for your work, Borsoka. -- Khazar2 (talk) 18:53, 31 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

As a side note, this may be the first time I've had a chance to review an article with actual Khazars in it, which I'm quite excited about. (My own username comes not from ethnic heritage but a previous obsession with Pavic's Dictionary of the Khazars.) -- Khazar2 (talk) 19:58, 31 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Dear Khazar2, thank you for your review. Please find my comments below. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, this looks good so far. I've posted some initial comments below.

" sacred ruler or kende of the Hungarians, their military leader or gyula" -- this is a little confusing. Do you mean that these are the four possibilities for what he could have been? Or that ruler/kende are synonyms, as are military leader/gyula?
- Thanks. Fixed (?). Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
can it be clarified what the origin of the infobox image is File:Almos2.jpg?
- Thanks. Deleted (Sorry, I cannot answer the question. Furthermore, it is not the best quality picture.) Borsoka (talk) 02:43, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
" Gyula Kristó[11] and Victor Spinei" -- it would help to give a word of context on these two. Could you add something like "Historians Gyula..."
- Thanks. Fixed. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"as it is proposed by Kristó" -- do you mean that the preceding sentence is Kristo's theory? Or that he also proposed the name?
- Thanks. Fixed. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Early life" -- seems like a bit of a misnomer for this section, which entirely deals with events before his birth
- Thanks. Modiefied. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
" that his election was initiated by the Khazar khagan." -- is the "his" here Arpad or Almos?
- Thanks. Fixed. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Gyula Kristó and many other historians" -- only Kristo appears to be cited here. Does she/he mention the other historians, too?
- Thanks. A reference to an enncyclopedia is added. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"our word an our command." -- should this be "and"?
- Thanks. Fixed. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
File:HetVezer-ChroniconPictum.jpg needs a tag for its US copyright status. -- Khazar2 (talk) 19:58, 31 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks. Deleted (Sorry, I cannot answer the question. Furthermore, it is not the best quality picture.) Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Checklist

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	~~see clarity points above.~~ Spotchecks show no sign of copyright issues.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	~~I'm checking with another user on the copyright tag of the falcon statue--more soon.~~
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	~~infobox image needs a caption explaining the image's origin~~
	7. Overall assessment.	Pass

I've removed another image from the article; since Ukraine doesn't have freedom of panorama, it's not clear that a picture of a sculpture is uncopyrighted until we have more information about the sculpture's origins, which wasn't readily available. With this image cut, the article is ready to pass. -- Khazar2 (talk) 14:17, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]