User talk:Aspat25
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[edit]Hello, Aspat25, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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[edit]Hi, I wanted to drop a note about your draft. I see that you're using Wikipedia as a source, however keep in mind that Wikipedia is not seen as a reliable source and as such, cannot source itself. The reason for this is that since anyone can edit the site, it will never really ever meet the requirements needed to make it reliable. As such, this needs sourcing.
You also need to be careful of tone and style. For example, the section "How to Decrease Chance of Cyber Attack" comes across as a "how to guide". Wikipedia isn't meant to be a how to guide, so a section like that will need to be re-written. A better way to have the section would be to label it "Prevention" and make the section about methods that authorities in the field have stated can help prevent or decrease the chances of a cyber attack. You also want to avoid making statements that tell the reader that something is important to know or anything that could be seen as a personal, subjective statement, as this can come across as a personal opinion or original research.
I hope that this helps! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:16, 28 June 2019 (UTC)
Anthony Spataro Reflective essay
[edit]My reflection essay Anthony Spataro Critiquing articles: I listened to what my peers aid and fixed what I had to. My peers gave helpful advice and when I saw what they said I realized adding it to my own paper would help a lot. I took the same route in reviewing others articles; I do not care about hurting feelings you have to tell them how it is so they can succeed. I made sure to check over my peers because they either had small contributions or nothing sourced so I told them to fix it. Summarizing your contributions: I did my own article about modern cyber security. I feel as I brought a different spin or point of view to the previous articles and covered things they did not have in them. My article rounded out the preventions of cyber attacks in modern cyber security Peer review: What did your peers recommend you change on your article? My peers liked my article; they just told me to remove a sentence which was, you could ay bias. I was talking about how business need cyber security more than regular consumers but that is not always true so I removed it. Feedback: Did you receive feedback from other Wikipedia editors, and if so, how did you respond to and handle that feedback? I did not receive ay feedback with my article. Wikipedia generally: What did you learn from contributing to Wikipedia? How does a Wikipedia assignment compare to other assignments you've done in the past? How can Wikipedia be used to improve public understanding of our field/your topic? Why is this important? I learned that Wikipedia can easily have fake news or become manipulated; but with the right people and motives it can be a great repository of knowledge. It is important to understand cyber security because since everything is shifting towards computers and technology, it is creating a whole new realm of possibilities for criminals. It helps you become safe in this new and exciting era of technology.
Moved to userspace
[edit]Hi, I moved your article to User:Aspat25/Modern Cyber Security. I saw that another user had proposed it for deletion, stating that it was too similar to the article on computer security. Offhand I do have to agree with them, now that I look at the similarity between the two pages. I think that there may be merit in changing this to be an article on the overall history of computer security, as there are pages on various different events and a page that gives an overall timeline of security hacking, but not a prose type page or section. Other than this, there are still some issues with first person writing (it should be in third person) and subjective terms or phrases such as "it is important". The issue with subjective language is that it comes across as a single opinion or perspective, which goes against Wikipedia's neutrality guidelines. We can't say if one thing is important or not. We can say that others have stated that something is important, but it's not something that we ourselves can do as editors. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:50, 29 July 2019 (UTC)