Talk:The Monster (novella)/GA1
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Reviewer: Truthkeeper88 (talk · contribs) 02:05, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
- Lead
- I had to read the sentence twice about Henry and the doctor - for some reason I thought the doctor's face was disfigured. The sentence flows nicely, but it's a lot of information to parse. Maybe try shortening a little. Otherwise, a really nice lead.
- I changed this to: "The story takes place in the small, fictional town of Whilomville, New York. An African American coachman named Henry Johnson, who is employed by the town's physician, Dr. Trescott, becomes horribly disfigured after he saves his employer's son from a fire."
- Background
- Nicely done
- Writing and publication history
- Link Oxted?
- Done
- Link Homefield - or clarify, I've lost the thread in terms of where they were.
- McClures or McClure's?
- McClure's, fixed.
- Perhaps unnecessary question: reading the plot summary I found myself wondering how long this is, which isn't mentioned until the Style section. I'm not sure this is the place, but I'm wondering if the length - short story/novelette/novella is relevant to the writing section, and if so, whether it can be scrunched in there somehow. Hope this makes sense.
- Crane referred to the story as a "novelette" while he was writing it, so I think that's worth noting here. I added/reworded the following: "Crane initially sent his "novelette", a manuscript of more than 21,000 words, to McClure's, along with several other works including "The Bride Comes to Yellow Sky". It remained unpublished for nearly a year."
- Plot summary
- I've never seen the characters italicized. Do you normally do that?
- I originally had the characters bolded in Red Badge, but sometime during the review stage someone changed them to italics because of the MOS. I just kind of carried it into this, in lieu of writing a characters section or something.
- The new Trescott house - rebuilt after the fire?
- Yes, I've clarified -- "newly built".
- Themes
- Various critics have written about the story's paradox themes of deformity and monstrosity. > paradoxical themes?
- Ah, much better. That sentence has always bothered me.
The rest look very nice. I'll have another read through tomorrow to see whether anything else needs work. Your usual high standard and well-written work. A pleasure to read. Truthkeeper (talk) 02:25, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
- Yay! Thanks so much for taking the time to review. It's a lesser Crane stories, but one that has become quite popular over the past forty years or so (as opposed to most of his other stories, that become less popular). Let me know if anything else needs to be done. María (yllosubmarine) 14:35, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
- I forgot to look at the images, but need to walk away from the computer for a little while. I'm assuming you're taking this to FAC, so want to be certain everything looks good, though to be honest haven't found much to complain about. It's a very solid piece of work. Truthkeeper (talk) 14:37, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
- Images are fine. I've passed it. Good luck. Truthkeeper (talk) 15:07, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
- I forgot to look at the images, but need to walk away from the computer for a little while. I'm assuming you're taking this to FAC, so want to be certain everything looks good, though to be honest haven't found much to complain about. It's a very solid piece of work. Truthkeeper (talk) 14:37, 4 December 2011 (UTC)