Talk:Playboy Enterprises, Inc. v. Starware Publishing Corp./GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Grandiose (talk · contribs) 20:23, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I will be conducting a full review shortly. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 20:23, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Spelling and grammar need examining throughout. I understand the article is part of one of our ambassador drives. In this case, spelling and grammar checks should be obvious to a school or college student. Among obvious faults are "It's content" (which should be "its content"), the use of "1)" in the middle of prose, which should be avoided, and which is accompanied by an initial capital in the middle of a sentence. "Nor" at the beignning of a sentence is un-encyclopedic. On a technical notes there should be no space before references. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 20:23, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Sourcing - some secondary sources are needed. Writing about cases does involve relying on the judg[e]ment itself, but other sources should be included. Presumably you found out about the case somewhere - do you have a textbook, or casebook, or web materials? If they are reliable sources, include them. There are plenty of opportunities.

Referencing - each paragraph should have at least one reference. If it is the judgment itself, then duplicate the reference merely at the end of each one. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 20:40, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Layout - do not include the statute section in the way it currently is. Give the section a more suitable heading, for example "Discussion of U.S.C. Section 106" then incorporate the statute as much as possible without merely listing it. Reference direct quotations to a source online of the code, if available. Reference this section - there are currently no references.

Linking - there should be more wikilinks. For example, I'd expect to find "Playboy Enterprises" linked, "Copyright infringement" "USC" linked on first use and not thereafter (this usually means the lead). Also link terms of legal jargon - "South Florida", "partial summary judgment", "Concise Statement of Undisputed Facts" (if possible); and anything else (eg. "CD-ROM"). Remove any links from "See also" if they are used in the main body. Delete empty "External links" or "See also" if these remain empty. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 20:53, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Placing article on hold for 7 days. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 20:53, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The seven days have now elapsed. I'm going to fail the article - but please renominate it once these issues have been dealt with - there is no minimum period for good faith nominations. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 21:16, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]