Talk:Paul Brown

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Would someone tell the schmuck who continually refers to Ohio State as THE Ohio State University that he is incorrect. The only people who use this term are the arrogant fans and alumni of OSU--thus that makes it a violation of NPOV.

I don't know about that. All of the colleges copyright notices include the word "the" before Ohio State. The Ohio State University's logo actually includes the word "The" as well. The Ohio State University — Official website Giddeanx (talk) 18:31, 24 July 2008 (UTC)

Southern Manifesto

I do not understand why Paul Brown is included in this category. The Southern Manifesto was a document denouncing 'Brown vs Board of Education', signed by some Southern Congressmen and Senators. The only things I am aware of connecting Paul Brown to this subject are his name (coincidence) and that he helped end the color line in pro football. Is there something that directly connects him to the battle to desegregate schools?Clubiguana 05:00, 22 April 2007 (UTC)Clubiguana

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Naming of the Browns

Two of the paragraphs in here conflict each other on the naming of the Browns. The second to last in the Ohio State part, and the first one in the Cleveland Browns Part. Rkrgoat (talk) 17:06, 25 October 2008 (UTC)

The former paragraph also appears in Cleveland Browns. I've added a tag to call attention to the contradiction. White 720 (talk) 03:16, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

Wiseguy007 07:00, 12 June 2013 (UTC) The Cleveland Browns page is the most accurate concerning the history of the team's name (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cleveland_Browns#Founding_and_success_in_the_AAFC_.281944.E2.80.9349.29). Contrary to popular belief, the team was not named after Paul Brown and it is incorrectly stated that it is on the Paul Brown page.

Huh

What are you people talking about? 75.150.195.49 (talk) 20:41, 25 September 2009 (UTC)

Infobox

The part of the infobox that lists his former teams says he was a player, not a coach. Somebody should probably fix that. 67.161.188.134 (talk) 23:44, 17 June 2010 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Paul Brown/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Sarastro1 (talk · contribs) 22:12, 25 August 2012 (UTC)

This looks pretty good overall. There are a few concerns with encyclopedic tone, but nothing major, just a list of nit-picks.

Lead

• "Brown in 1968 helped found and coach the Bengals": Maybe "In 1968, Brown co-founded and coached the Bengals"
  • Changed to "In 1968, Brown co-founded and was the first coach of the Bengals".--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "He was the first coach to call plays in to his quarterback…" Not too sure what this means
  • Quarterbacks would call their own plays before Brown came along, but I removed it because it's causing some confusion, and because the list is too long.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "…give players intelligence and personality tests and test players on their knowledge of a playbook.": I think this sentence has run out of steam by this point, and there are a couple too many ands.
  • Reduced to three items.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "Brown also played a role in integrating the game…": This is a little clunky, but I'm not too sure that I can think of a way to improve it. "Integrating the game" does not sound quite right.
  • I tweaked it a bit, although we could just get rid of that part of the sentence if it's still confusing.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

Early life

• "imparted on his son a proclivity for meticulousness and discipline": A little wordy here, and I'm not too sure it's worth including. At the very least, it could be toned down.
  • Removed.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "While he played football as a child, Brown weighed less than 150 pounds and at first concentrated his athletic energies on the pole vault": Is this "while" meaning although, or meaning at the same time?
  • Changed to "although".--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "But Massillon coach Dave Stewart saw Brown's determination to be a good vaulter despite his size and brought him onto the football team": Not too sure that I can see the connection between the two parts of the sentence here; what does his size or determination have to do with the football team.
  • The point we're trying to get across is that he was small for a football player, but despite that he was undersized coaches notice his determination. I've tried to clarify this a bit.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "Massillon posted a record of 15–3…": Could the win-loss thing be linked?
  • Done.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "As the Great Depression set in, Brown was happy to have a job, having married his high school sweetheart Katie Kester a year earlier.": A little random as written. Does it mean that he would not have accepted, but just wanted a job because of the depression? Otherwise, I'm not sure of the point of this sentence.
  • Moved the sentence and simplified to say he married Katie Kester in 1929, without the other context.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

High school coaching career

• "Brown only spent two years at Severn, but they were highly successful ones.": Not really a GA issue, but some redundancy here; maybe "Brown spent two, highly successful years at Severn".
  • Simplified to say he spent two successful years at Severn.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "In his first season, the team went undefeated and won a Maryland state championship.": Similar, maybe "The team were undefeated in his first season, and won a Maryland state championship". Also, just checking that it is "a Maryland state championship", rather than "the Maryland state championship"?
  • Fixed and changed to "the" state championship. Using "the team was" instead of "were" per American usage.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "team's record was 5–2–1": A link here again? I always get confused when the 3rd number turns up!
  • Linked and called it a "win-loss-tie record".--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "But Severn was no Massillon; it was not a hotbed of football, and academics took precedence": Unencyclopedic? And a little informal. Maybe merge with the next sentence and say something like Brown preferred the focus on football of Massillon and took the job when it became available.
  • I just removed this, because it's not all that important or notable in any event.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "His assignment was simple: resuscitate a Tigers team that had fallen into mediocrity…": Again, I think we may be stretching encyclopaedic style.
  • Got rid of "resuscitate", just saying his assignment was to turn the team around.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• First paragraph of Massillon Tigers: I'm not too keen on the long sentence-short sentence structure here, for example "No Tigers player was allowed to sit on the bench during a game. Brown made them stand.": It seems a little over-stylised.
  • Used a semicolon instead of a period, and also got rid of a similar structure a couple sentences previous...not sure that addresses it, but I'm unsure what to do.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "By then, Brown had set his football machine fully into motion…": Again, a little much?
  • Toned down to "put his system into place".--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "Brown invented the playbook and tested his players on their knowledge of it.": Sorry, lost me there.
  • Put in a description of a playbook. It's surprising there's no Wiki article on it -- every American football team uses one.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

College and military career

• "Ohio State officials were skeptical about the 33-year-old Brown making the transition to college football, but they were swayed in part by the consequences of not hiring him.[32] The worry was that if Ohio State passed on Brown, the school might lose talented high school recruits loyal to him." Maybe merge these into one sentence? "Ohio State officials were skeptical about the 33-year-old making the transition to college football but worried that they might lose talented high school recruits loyal to Brown if they did not sign him."
  • Nice suggestion. Done.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "His men were to be "lean and hungry".[36] "The she-wolf fights best on an empty stomach," he told them.[36]" Not sure how necessary this is.
  • Removed.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "Brown's first year at Ohio State was considered a success.": By who?
  • Got rid of "considered" as it was objectively successful, as reflected in the source.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "which the school's boosters…": The what???
  • Americanism. Changed to "supporters".--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "The Buckeyes tied for second place in the Western Conference and finished 13th in the AP Poll, and Brown finished fourth place in balloting for national Coach of the Year." Long sentence, and a little hard to follow, but may work by cutting the first "and".
  • Split into two sentences for clarity.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "The strong start was another proof both of Brown's system and his eye for talent": This looks a little too favourable to Brown and suggests editorial voice. We need to say who held this opinion.
  • This reflects the source, but I removed it because it's a little POV.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• One thing that does not really come across to me, as a non-specialist, is where all the college/school games were going. Were they just one of games, or part of a competition? The Western Conference is mentioned, and it says that a victory "gave the Buckeyes their first-ever national title", but I have no sense of what the teams were competing in.
  • College football is inherently confusing, but I tried to clarify it a bit. Basically teams compete in conferences -- I described the Western Conference (now the Big Ten) as one composed of teams from the Midwestern U.S. They can win conference titles by having the best record among teams in their conference, but there's no postseason tournament to decide which team is the best in the country. That is determined via a poll of sportswriters, coaches and other officials conducted by the Associated Press. The poll is not official, but teams use it to "claim" the national title. About 99.9% of the time, the claim is uncontested. I tried to clarify this part, too.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "Brown was re-classified 1-A in February 1944 and commissioned two months later as a lieutenant in the U.S. Navy.": This is suggesting that he was earlier deemed unfit, but this is not in the article.
  • I changed it to "classified". He was never deemed unfit, but was also not deemed available for service until 1944.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "Ward lined up deep-pocketed owners…": Not sure about "deep-pocketed" here. Maybe simply "wealthy".
  • Done.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

Professional coaching career

• "from the wreckage of the AAFC…" Encyclopedic tone?
  • Made more matter-of-fact.--Batard0 (talk) 07:57, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "bringing the team the best running back in the game but also planting the seed of Brown's fall from grace in Cleveland": Again, a little grand, but also which Brown are we talking about, as we were recently introduced to another?
  • Indeed. I removed this part. The "Brown" is Paul Brown.
• "It all came to crashing down…" Encyclopedic tone?
  • Removed.--Batard0 (talk) 09:12, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "He became particularly tight…" Encyclopedic tone?
  • Changed to "close to"--Batard0 (talk) 09:12, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "The final straw…" Encyclopedic tone?
  • Rephrased a bit.--Batard0 (talk) 09:12, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "Ultimately, the relationship between coach and owner was never repaired, and Ernie Davis never played in a professional game, dying of his disease on May 18, 1963."
  • Fixed.--Batard0 (talk) 09:12, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "Because Brown was still receiving his annual salary and liked to golf, it was said that the only two people who made more money at the sport were Arnold Palmer and Jack Nicklaus.": This could be rephrased to make it clear that "sport" here refers to golf.
  • Repeated "golf"; I don't think it detracts much, and I couldn't immediately come up with a rephrasing that doesn't repeat it.--Batard0 (talk) 09:12, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "he was calling it quits" Encyclopedic tone?
  • Just said "retiring".--Batard0 (talk) 09:12, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

Coaching tree

• Slightly odd title here! And are there any references for this?
  • Hmm...I don't have any direct references. This has been in the article for some time. I could remove it, I think, until some decent sourcing can be found. I commented it out for now. "Coaching tree" is an American football term (borrowed from "family tree"). It's used to show how coaches influenced and were influenced by other coaches.--Batard0 (talk) 09:12, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

Head coaching record

• References?
  • Added.--Batard0 (talk) 14:20, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

General

• I'm not a fan of citing every sentence, particularly when consecutive sentences have the same reference. It looks messy, if nothing else. Although not about GAs, I would recommend having a lokk at this, but this is not a pass/fail issue for this review, and I am happy to pass with the references like this.
  • I went through and fixed any instances where the same citation was used twice in a row, except in the case of quotations, which I kept cited no matter what.--Batard0 (talk) 09:12, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• Without anything too bad, I get a vague feeling that this article is a little slanted towards Brown. Just the odd phrase which seems to suggest he was very good. Again, not really a problem here, and anything which suggests POV is listed above. So, not a pass/fail issue.
  • I agree that it has some subtle bias. I put in a paragraph at the end of the lead to say Brown wasn't universally liked, which is reflected in the article. I also toned down some of the language here and there, and added in a bit about his firing saying the team's captain thought the Browns couldn't win with Brown as coach. Any other suggestions much appreciated.--Batard0 (talk) 09:12, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• Dablink to AAFC.
  • Fixed with Dab solver.--Batard0 (talk) 14:20, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• Problem with ISBN on Levy book.
  • Fixed.--Batard0 (talk) 10:00, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

Sources

• Unable to do full spot-checks, but able to do a few, just a few issues:
  • I know Cantor is not online, but I'm able to quote supporting passages from the physical book on requested references if you'd like me to.--Batard0 (talk) 14:20, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "His son Robin died of cancer in 1978. Brown and his first wife are buried at Rose Hill Cemetery in Massillon." not fully supported; only that Brown buried there, nothing about his first wife or son in either ref.
  • Added a citation for his son's death; I'm not sure where the rest of it came from. I don't see anything on his wife being buried there, so I removed it and substituted a more reliable source for Brown's burial place.--Batard0 (talk) 10:00, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• "Brown was re-classified 1-A in February 1944 and commissioned two months later as a lieutenant in the U.S. Navy.": Ref gives wrong page: according to google books, this information is on the previous page and does not support "re-classified as 1-A".
  • Added two refs saying he was re-classified 1-A in February and that he was commissioned in April.--Batard0 (talk) 10:00, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
• Not sure what reference 136 is supposed to be supporting.
  • This I think was the NYT obit; removed.--Batard0 (talk) 10:00, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

Images

• I'm not sure that 3 fair-use images are justified here. One would be fine, but what justification do the other two have?
  • The two within the body of the article have been released by the copyright owner for use in non-commercial contexts, but still of course need a fair-use rationale. I was hoping to keep them on that basis, but would be happy to remove them if it's a stretch.--Batard0 (talk) 10:00, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

I will place the article on hold for the moment, but there should be no real problems. Sarastro1 (talk) 22:22, 25 August 2012 (UTC)

Just want to say thanks for the excellent and thorough review. Everything is much appreciated.--Batard0 (talk) 14:20, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

• I also want to note, just FYI, that the article's lead section has been the subject of a minor editing dispute during the past month or so as it was waiting for a GA review. A user made some additions to the lead that called the Browns a "minor league" team, highlighted his losses in championship games and deleted some cited information, apparently in an effort to downplay Brown's accomplishments. While I think the spirit of these edits was good -- the article clearly needs to focus some more on the negative aspects of Brown's career -- they were generally disruptive. Another user reverted a first round of edits, and I reverted a second round of edits. I don't believe this qualifies as an edit war, which would be grounds for a quickfail, but I thought I ought to at least bring it to your attention in case you want to give it any consideration.--Batard0 (talk) 14:41, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

Final replies

• All changes look good now, and happy to pass.
• On sourcing, I was able to do enough spot-checks to be happy to pass, so no problem on the Cantor.
• I'm not an image expert, and have no firm opinion either way. The cautious way would be to take them out, but I'll leave that up to you. Maybe check with someone better with images than me!
• I think the situation you describe about editing is not necessarily a problem for GA the way you describe it, and I'm happy to pass anyway.
• Passing now, well done! Sarastro1 (talk) 21:41, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

Criticisms

1) you left out http://nypl.bibliocommons.com/item/show/10675453052_pb,_the_paul_brown_story not a good job there; that's a published work - this alone should not make it a good article

• This is an autobiography, and as such is a WP:PRIMARY source. Wikipedia policy generally prefers secondary sources over primary ones except for with straightforward statements of fact and such. It wasn't necessary to use this source here, since there are plenty of secondary sources that cover all the relevant material. --Batard0 (talk) 06:17, 7 September 2012 (UTC)

2) oh my goodness, where is this book in this article: * When Pride Still Mattered, A Life of Vince Lombardi, by David Maraniss, 1999, ISBN 978-0-618-90499-0 ....strong evidence is produced by Maraniss that Brown was in fact the catalyst for Lombardi developing his football strategy from Paul Brown

• Can you cite that? Or better yet, just edit the article to include it? Lombardi never coached under Brown as far as I'm aware, but if there's some connection that's traceable to a reliable source, put it in please. --Batard0 (talk) 06:17, 7 September 2012 (UTC)

3) oh my, please reevaluate Piascik's book, clearly he is saying Brown is the greatest football coach of all time

• Where is he or anyone else saying this? I think the article needs to be more balanced to cover the negative aspects of Brown's career, but we need to do this using reliable sources. --Batard0 (talk) 06:17, 7 September 2012 (UTC)

4) oh my, where is this book? : * Ratterman, George; with Deindorfer, Robert G. (1962). Confessions of a Gypsy Quarterback; Inside the Wacky World of Pro Football. New York: Coward-McCann, Inc. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 66.234.33.13 (talk) 02:28, 7 September 2012 (UTC)

• Please see WP:PRIMARY. It could be included if it has some good facts that can't be found elsewhere, but if not we should probably stick to the secondary sources. Definitely edit to include it if it does. --Batard0 (talk) 06:17, 7 September 2012 (UTC)

Jim Brown

Massively complicated stuff there. I do not think it is treated that well in this article. I certainly do not believe it is GA stuff, that being said, it's a very, very, very complicated issue. 66.234.33.13 (talk) 02:32, 7 September 2012 (UTC)

• Could you edit the article to improve the coverage of this, using reliable sources? --Batard0 (talk) 06:18, 7 September 2012 (UTC)

Failure to account for Jim Brown

A failure in this article to account for how Paul Brown dealt with Jim Brown's perspective on race relations during his career will prohibit this article from ever being considered FA. I am sorry. 66.234.33.13 (talk) 02:44, 7 September 2012 (UTC)

• It would be helpful to be more specific here, or better yet to just improve the article yourself. --Batard0 (talk) 06:19, 7 September 2012 (UTC)

Assessment comment

The comment(s) below were originally left at Talk:Paul Brown/Comments, and are posted here for posterity. Following several discussions in past years, these subpages are now deprecated. The comments may be irrelevant or outdated; if so, please feel free to remove this section.

I would like proof or references that Paul Brown got ideas from Jock Sutherland. The paragraph referring to Sutherland IS NOT footnoted. Where does this information come from? 208.228.103.33 15:47, 20 January 2007 (UTC)Alex Everitt

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