Talk:Pacific Salmon War/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 15:38, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Happy to review the article.

Review

The article is generally is fine shape, and the comments that follow are about relatively minor issues that can easily be addressed.

Lead section

Unlink Canada; United States; Premier (MOS:OL).
Link Alaskan.
CFMETR needs to be written in full (the abbreviation can then follow).
Unlink Prince Rupert (duplicate link).

Done all above

The map lacks sources, what makes you think it is accurate?

Cross-referencing with others mostly, but removed because I can't find a great way to prove it's accurate.

1 Background

Consider linking Pacific salmon and International Pacific Salmon Fisheries Commission, even though they are linked in the lead section.
Replace year-to-year with ‘annually’?
fourteen or fifteen years is normally written ‘14 or 15 years’. (minor point)
Link migratory; spawning (Spawn (biology)). .

Done all

2 Conflict

Amend Brian Tobin to ‘Tobin’ and unlink (it’s a duplicate link).
Twelve – ‘12’?
Who is Barbara Rothstein?
Unlink Fraser River; Minister of Fisheries (duplicate links).
the Canadians – Canada is better imo.
Link C$ (Canadian dollar); Native American tribes; torpedo.
the war was essentially ended – is ‘war’ a little strong-sounding here?

Done all

3 Resolution

Unlink sockeye salmon (duplicate link).
Move the link to chinook salmon to where it first occurs in the text.
I would amend Bill Clinton to ‘U.S. President Bill Clinton’, to be consistent.
Who are David Strangway and Jean Chrétien?

Done

4.1 Footnotes

Consider linking The Economist and other publications with their own article in Wikipedia.
Refs 2 and 6 seem to be identical, and would normally be amended using something like <ref name="" />.
Consider using the {{subscription required}} template for Refs 7, 13, 19 and 21.
Ref 1(Restoring Fraser River Salmon) is in title case throughout.
According to MOS:FNNR, “Editors may use any citation method they choose, but it should be consistent within an article.” The {{sfn}} style is prevalent, but Ref 1 provides complete, formatted details about the source.
Avoid purely numerical dates (e.g. (2020-02-01) in Ref 7).

think I got all this

4.2 Bibliography

Ref 1 has a location specified, so the sources in this section need locations too, for the sake of consistency.
Presumably Karol de Zwager Brown’s last name is de Zwager Brown, not Brown?

Done both, removed location

6 External links

This section appears to be empty, so the title can be removed.

On hold

I'm putting the article on hold for a week until ~~15 July~~ 26 July to allow time for the issues raised to be addressed once you return from your wikibreak. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 17:52, 7 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Amitchell125, I think I've addressed everything. Let me know if that's not the case. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 14:48, 18 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

All good, now passing. Amitchell125 (talk) 19:31, 19 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]