Talk:Jamey Wright/GA1

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 14:40, 14 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I'll be reviewing this article as part of the July 2021 good article nominations backlog drive! Any section that I've marked with a Working tag means that I haven't finished leaving comments there, but you're free to begin making changes as soon as you see them! — Ghost River 14:40, 14 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

Early life

Oklahoma City, Oklahoma → Oklahoma City, Oklahoma per MOS:SEAOFBLUE
Pipe "lettered" to Varsity letter

Professional career

Colorado Rockies

Since each level-four head (1996, etc.) has such a short paragraph attached, it might be easier not to include them
On that note, I looked at the Larry Stone source, where his domination in the minors was contrasted with struggling in the majors – without the split heads, this could be a good segue into the next section
Very nitpicky: I usually use "Class A", "Double-A", and "Triple-A" over A, AA, and AAA, but that's entirely an aesthetic preference
- I tend to use Class A or Single-A, but I'm not as big a fan of the AA-level; I think that was left from some other editor, so I went ahead and changed it. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 19:14, 7 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The flow of the 1996 section, particularly with regards to the knee surgery, seemed awkward, so I looked for more information and found some here. Looks like he actually had two surgeries, an arthroscopic one for the slide and then an additional offseason procedure after slipping on ice.
the only scoring for the Cubs coming on a Sammy Sosa home run → giving up one solo home run to Sammy Sosa
Pipe the first instance of starting rotation in the body
"Recalled on August 2, he posted a 4.18 ERA the rest of the season for Colorado" → "for the Rockies" (just to be sure to differentiate from Colorado Springs)

Milwaukee Brewers

Similar to the last section, I think the year-by-year subheads can be 86'd
"Wright was traded with Henry Blanco" → "Wright and Henry Blanco were traded"
WL rotator cuff tear
"Through the end of July he had a 6–4 record, but he..." → "Despite entering August with a 6–4 record, Wright..."
"In 2001, Wright was the Opening Day starter for the Brewers on April 2. The only run he allowed in seven innings was a home run to Gary Sheffield, but that was all the scoring in a 1–0 loss to the Los Angeles Dodgers." → "The Brewers tapped Wright to open the 2001 season, starting on April 2 against the Los Angeles Dodgers. He went seven innings, allowing the only run of the 1–0 loss with a solo homer to Gary Sheffield."
Link "intercostal" to Intercostal muscles
Wright actually only hit batters in 10 straight games, per MLB.com and this book. He had 12 total HBP in that span, which I assume means he had a couple multi-HBP games.
- Absolutely correct. Thanks for catching that! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 20:02, 7 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

St. Louis Cardinals

Move the last sentence from the Brewers section to here Done
""That definitely does not count," he remarked in 2013, when he discussed his desire to finally make an appearance in the playoffs." → "In 2013, when Wright expressed his desire to make an appearance in the playoffs, he told reporters that his time with St. Louis "definitely does not count"." Done

2003

The header doesn't flow with the rest, maybe try something like "Journeyman" like I did for David Hale Done
Specify details of Mariners contract (one-year, minor league contract with a $400,000 option if he made the majors) Done
"but was the last player cut prior to the regular season, released on March 18" → "but was released on March 18, the last player cut prior to the regular season." Done
"called him up to the Majors" → "called him up to the majors" Done
Comma after "on September 6" Done
Move the first three sentences of the next section (Colorado Rockies) to this section, so that this subhead encompasses his entire time bouncing around the (mostly) minors Done

Colorado Rockies

Rename section as "Second stint with the Rockies"
- Renamed this and the earlier section to Colorado Rockies, # stint to keep the team name at the beginning of the section header (just aesthetic purposes). Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 20:10, 7 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Wright beat the giants on August 2 but lost his next five starts" → "After beating the Giants 4-3 on August 2, Wright proceeded to lose his next five starts."
"Wright was moved to the bullpen" → "the Rockies moved Wright to the bullpen"
I believe this is a more useful source for showing that Wright was moved to the bullpen. Since it's paywalled, it basically says that he was moved to make room for Day and for Sunny Kim, and includes a great quote from Wright that "This could be the beginning of the second half of my career, and I would like it to be here."

San Francisco Giants

Delink San Francisco Giants here, as it is mentioned earlier
"He was brought to spring training in 2006 as a non-roster invitee. Following a strong spring training performance, Wright was promoted to the major league roster and named the team's number five starter, beating out Brad Hennessey for the job by pitching nine scoreless innings over the spring." → "He was brought to spring training in 2006 as a non-roster invitee. Following a strong performance there, pitching nine scoreless innings, the Giants promoted Wright to the major leagues as their No. 5 starter, beating out Brad Hennessey."
Include some background for the "struggling Wright" – the article mentions a 1-7 record and 6.40 ERA over 13 outings, as well as giving up five runs on ten hits in his last start.
""fell far short of expectations in 2006."" → ""fell far short of expectations in 2006"." per MOS:LQ

Texas Rangers

"Wright signed a minor league contract with an invitation to spring training with the Texas Rangers." → "the Texas Rangers signed Wright to a minor-league contract, with an invitation to spring training." (gets rid of "with" repetition)
This spring training recap specifies that he was in contention with Kameron Loe and Bruce Chen for that five-hole
I also found this article about his rehab assignments

Kansas City Royals

"On February 10, 2009, Wright signed a minor league contract with the Royals and was invited to spring training, later becoming the only non-roster player to make the team's roster." → "On February 10, 2009, Wright signed a minor league contract with the Royals and was invited to spring training. He was the only non-roster invitee that year to be named to the team on opening day." (with references distributed between two sentences as needed) Done
Specify that he was often pitching in relief
- Added in the previous section that he would only make two more starts in his career. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 11:37, 18 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Cleveland Indians and Seattle Mariners

"he "has become an increasingly vital member of Seattle's bullpen."" → "he had "become an increasingly vital member of Seattle's bullpen"." per MOS:LQ

Los Angeles Dodgers

Good

Tampa Bay Rays

Specifies here that his contract was selected on 3/31
"On September 1, he made his first start since 2007 in a game against Oakland where manager Joe Maddon wanted to skip right-handed Roberto Hernández's start and let left-handed relief pitchers handle most of the game against a predominantly left-handed lineup." → "On September 1, while facing a predominantly left-handed Oakland lineup, Rays manager Joe Maddon elected to skip right-handed starter Roberto Hernández's start in favor of a bullpen game. Wright, pitching in his first start since 2007, allowed one run in..."
Write out the whole of the ALDS acronym the first time it's mentioned
Specify whether Tampa lost that game or lost the series 3-1

Los Angeles Dodgers

Rename section "Second stint with the Dodgers"
"Major League contract" → "major league contract"
"He only pitched two. He allowed" → "he only pitched two, allowing"
Spell out NLDS acronym

End of career and statistics

Delink Texas Rangers, mentioned above
Specify what level of affiliate the OKC Dodgers are

Pitching style

Good

Personal life

WL Dallas, Texas Done
Pipe "college team" to college baseball
- Did a more general article on college sports in the United States, since the Oklahoma Sooners are best known for football. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 11:39, 18 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

References

For [5] (True Blue LA), add SB Nation in the publisher field

General comments

Article is stable and content is presented neutrally
Pictures are relevant and OK for use
Content is both broad and focused except areas noted above where detail can be increased
No obvious copyvio problems, highest %s are due to mirror sites, proper nouns, and direct quotes

I want to apologize for going MIA. I am dealing with a recent bipolar diagnosis (this is the age where it typically manifests, and although I've likely had hypomanic and I've certainly had depressive episodes before, this was my first mixed one) and the antisocial parts of WP were easier than anything collaborative. Now that I'm on a proper medication regimen, I hope to be more present, not just in solo editing but in these fields. — Ghost River 17:03, 7 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

No problem; your help comes first! Thanks for another review, and let me know if anything more is needed! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 16:41, 8 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Great job, especially on incorporating those extra references! Happy to pass now! — Ghost River 22:40, 8 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]