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"Having suffered a wrong from a Polish nobleman and unable to obtain redress through official channels"... why not name the nobleman in question? I think it is weird to link a person without giving their name in text. A similar issue is with the " In 1747 they opened a public library in Warsaw" sentence, in which a misleading blue link to public library is in fact about a specific library, the Zaluski library. I'd strongly suggest that all such misleading, general links are properly described, without pipes.
more red links are needed; for example pl:Volumina legum is certainly notable
the article seems to rely heavily on paragraph citations. I strongly prefer the sentence citations, see here for why. I understand that we do not require sentence cites, so this is just my personal (if strong) recommendation.
I use pipes also to clarify the meaning for the casual reader (e.g. "joint state" and "election" in the first sentence, or to provide additional information for the reader to look up (e.g. "last king" in the first sentence). Using the entire names of articles linked does not seem appropriate here. Also nobles' democracy link in the following sentence: general sejm and nobles' democracy are not the same thing, but we don't have a demokracja szlachecka article yet, and the "General sejm" article explains a lot about the nobles' democracy. It seems that a piped link is needed here also. Swedish invasion is another piped link. Please let me know if you find such use objectionable. Orczar (talk) 03:58, 9 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Lead has an informal tone, eg. "playground", "From there it all went downhill." Could you have a look and make it more encyclopedic?
Lots of images. My feeling is that this disrupts the prose content. I would say that some of the images don't really benefit the reader. An easy example would be the foreign kings mentioned, I would struggle to put into words what seeing Charles X Gustav of Sweden adds to the article, for example. Generally there are quite a few portraits that I think could be omitted.
Images and portraits I see as important because they help the reader to develop intuitive feeling for the subject. The Polish-Lithuanian Commonwealth is an alien territory to most, and the graphics facilitate grasping the essence of what's being discussed. Good illustrations add to the article's content, not distract from it, and make it more accessible. Which is why fancy books have always had many color plates, and electronic media can easily afford the same. Orczar (talk) 23:07, 16 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I know you do a lot of articles, so being a little picky if you have p. 156-159 it ought to be pp. 156–159, with a double p and en-dash rather than hyphen.
There's a large part of "Culture of Mature Baroque" sourced only to #62. Not a major part of the article, so not a problem for GA, but really you ought to introduce other sources if you wanted to take the article further.
I checked my articles against a number of sources other than the main source (Gierowski in this case), but if the information was already referenced to Gierowski, I had usually not provided the additional (corroborating) reference. I used other references only when I found additional significant information. Now, after noticing how many multiple references Constitution of May 3, 1791 has, I realize I might have made a mistake in this respect. Orczar (talk) 14:54, 23 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Some reviewers in fact complain that articles I write have too many references, particularly for one sentence, but in fact one of the reasons I do so is that I try to back as up as much information as possible with sources allowing verification online (usually Google Books). It's hard to make everyone happy... --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here13:21, 25 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Hmm. The article does seemingly go between sources at length; a big potential problem here is close paraphrasing because it can manifest not just in wording but also the ordering of ideas and the way they're put together. Unfortunately the vast majority of the article's sources are unavailable, which makes checking for this rather difficult. In any case unfortunately I don't have time to help you address the far more subtle problems with the article like that (and whether they transgress the criteria), so I'm putting the article up for a second opinion to see what someone else makes of it. Grandiose(me, talk, contribs) 11:46, 25 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from Peripitus.
The cramming of images makes the text often hard to read and displaces many section headings. This is most evident on a smaller monitor - what looks good on a wide one is awful on someothers. I strongly suggest halving at least the number of images and, if they are seen as needed, use an image gallery either at the end or after each major section. I don't think the article meets the intent behind Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style_(layout)#Images.
I can see quite a few grammer issues and some other textual issues.
John Casimir's bad relations -> poor relations
his initial general alienation from the Commonwealth's nobility and armed forces -> "General" seems unneeded
which included introduction of majority voting rules -> including introduction....
the nobles' democracy, subjected to devastating wars -> replace the comma with "was"
in process helping decisively in 1683 to deliver Vienna from a Turkish onslaught -> very convoluted, missing "the" before process and how do you help decisively ? WOrd order seems an issue.
resulted in time in deterioration - "in time" is implied in the context
The protracted battlefield role - not at all sure what precisely this is intended to mean
of which many had practically lost their urban character, industry and manufacturing, and the state treasury. - the cities and town's lost the state treasury ? how do you practically lose character....did they practically lose their industry as well..I am unsure
a great wave during 1659-1663 - does this just mean "especially during 1659-1663" ?
reduced the total population by 1/3, down to 6–7 million -> reduced the population by a third to 6-7 million. "total" is implied "down to" is covered by reduced and third looks better than 1/3
The war end economic pressures - does this mean the pressures after the war's end or the pressures caused towards the war's end or those caused by the war's end ?
Szlachta's folwark, the predominant in the 16th century agricultural production organization type -> The predominant 16th century agricultural production organisation, Szlachta's folwark ...perhaps ?
Latifundia were present in any part - does this mean present in most parts, in all parts, or in some parts ?
what is an antiking ?
I could keep going as the issues are widespread. The poor layout of images, and the gramatical/textual issues are the only issues I see in this article meeting the GA criteria. Taking the reference accuracy and paraphrasing on faith (I lack the book and a working knowledge of Polish) all else looks good. The article does not meet all of the GA requirements at present - Peripitus(Talk)12:58, 27 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
So, on that note, I'm failing the article. As you know do renominate when the above issues have been addressed, but it's going to take a careful look at the article and would therefore be better done without the GAN hanging over it. Grandiose(me, talk, contribs) 15:00, 28 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Are you being sarcastic, Orczar? I'm pretty certain I've reviewed your articles (certainly Piotr's) before, and I'm careful always to leave the article on hold for at least seven days. There are deficiencies that were noted in the original review that haven't been dealt with, and there's a prose issue which spans the whole article and which would therefore take some time to complete. Because GANs aren't prejudicial, you could have this sorted and renominated in however long it takes, no problem with that. Grandiose(me, talk, contribs) 15:36, 28 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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