Talk:Development of Final Fantasy XV/GA1

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Reviewer: Rhain (talk · contribs) 07:51, 9 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'd be happy to take this one. It's only fair that I return the favour.

Lead

"Square Enix handled primary development on Final Fantasy XV, and was released worldwide in November 2016"—this reads as if Square Enix was released worldwide in November. Perhaps consider "...and the game was released..." or "...which was released...".
"Production of the game and the engine happened concurrently"—consider replacing with "occurred" or "took place".
- Really wasn't comfortable with this bit. I've cut it entirely. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:11, 9 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Staff

"...the logo survived almost unchanged through the game's development"—is this supported by the Game Informer source? I find it very interesting, but unless supported by a source, it's original research.
- Here is a scan of the relevant page. All info there supports the image commentary on the logo. The additional reference is there to make sure the purpose remained from Versus XIII to XV based on independent sources. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:11, 9 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Final Fantasy XV was originally a spin-off title..."—consider linking Spin-off (media).
Link Computer-generated imagery.
"After the game's name and platform change..."—when was this change? I understand this has been addressed in the lead, but it hasn't yet been mentioned in the body. Simply a month/year would likely suffice.

Development

"...following the departure of Hironobu Sakaguchi from the company"—consider adding a brief description of Sakaguchi's role. Perhaps even "...following the departure of series creator Hironobu Sakaguchi...".

Story and characters

"...multiple aspects were changed: these included..."—perhaps "...multiple aspects were changed, including..." would work better.
"The concept of reaper-worship in Lucis"—Lucis hasn't been properly introduced at this point, so readers will likely be confused. Consider revising.
- Sorted. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:11, 9 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"The story took place of a ten-year time period..."—is this supposed to be "...took place over a ten-year time period"?
"Roen's designs were retained..."—are they Roen's designs, or Takahara's?

World design

"They were meant to enable, e.g. levels in which the player character was shot at..."—perhaps I'm reading it wrong, but I'm struggling to understand this sentence. Also, "e.g." shouldn't be used.
- Leftover from the bad old days when this was a G-Zay-written part of the main article. I've dealt with it. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:11, 9 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Music

No need to link Kingdom Hearts again here.
What's the difference between the "main theme" and the "theme song"? If "Somnus" was retained as the main theme, how is "Stand by Me" the theme song? Apologies if I'm misunderstanding something.
- Done my best to clarify. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:11, 9 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Graphics

"...as it was holding the developers back."—would "restricting the developers" work better?
Consider linking Polygon.
"After the full shift onto next-gen..."—I understand what this is referring to, but "next-gen" has become a bit of an obsolete term. Perhaps "eighth generation consoles" would work. A few other sentences in the article also use this term.
"5000" should probably be "5,000" to be consistent with other numbers.
"...with a 30fps frame rate" is technical jargon to the layperson. Consider revising to "...with a frame rate of 30 frames per second".
"...the fact that the eight-generation console..." (paragraph 2) should be "eighth-generation".
Link motion capture.

Gameplay

I think the images are a lot clearer at 250 pixels, though I'll leave this decision to you.
Link Combo (video gaming).
Add "(HUD)" after "heads-up display".
"...relegated to AI-governed command functions"—the article hasn't explained what AI is yet. Consider revising to something like "...relegated to command functions governed by artificial intelligence (AI)" (and then adjust the first sentence in the "Artificial intelligence" section accordingly).
"Polishing work on the game is set to continue up until the final version is released"—unless this is referring to updates for the game, this should be reworded to reflect the game's release.

Artificial intelligence

"...a designer noted for his work on AI..."—I fail to see the relevance of this. Is this why he was chosen for the role of lead designer? If so, it may be useful to clarify, if even in a few words.

Announcement

I can't find anything to change here—just wanted to commend you on the writing in this section. These are often the most boring to read (and write, for that matter), but somehow you kept me entertained.

Final Fantasy XV Universe

"A free tech demo, Platinum Demo: Final Fantasy XV released on March 30"—add the year.
"...used gameplay similar to the Monster Strike series and incorporating classic Final Fantasy monsters"—I think this should be "incorporated'.
According to most sources, and the game's listing on the Google Play Store, Justice Monsters V should be Justice Monsters Five. Is there a reason the article uses the former?
"...first releasing on June 28, 2017"—reword to reflect past tense.
"...the game involved players..."—change to "involves".

Release

"Pax" should be written in capitals.
The second paragraph is written in future tense (simply hasn't been updated since the game's release, I presume), and should be reworded accordingly.
"While the Gold Version content did end up on disc..."—I can't seem to find this information in the source provided.
- Sorted. That was another editor's addition. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:11, 9 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
""Episode Prompto" will be released on June 27"—reword.

References

Absolutely phenomenal. Incredible range, all reliable, and all archived. Well done.

This may be the most interesting and well-written article I've read, which is why I have scrutinised it so vehemently. Definitely one of the longest articles I've read, yet it barely felt like it—not surprising, considering the quality I've come to expect from you. Besides a few grammatical fixes, all of my comments are basically just suggestions—feel free to accept or ignore as you please. I'll leave this on hold until my comments have been addressed. – Rhain ☔ 07:51, 9 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Rhain: I've addressed all the points above, and left some explanation where needed. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:11, 9 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@ProtoDrake: Thank you for addressing everything so quickly. I'm more than happy to present this article with the green plus it deserves.

Congratulations. I hope to see more content like this in the future. – Rhain ☔ 09:32, 9 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]