Talk:Cyprus in the Eurovision Song Contest 2010

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 20:50, 17 June 2022 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will start this review tomorrow! --K. Peake 20:50, 17 June 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Shouldn't Eurovision 2010: Epilogi tis kypriakis symmetochis be italicised in the infobox like it is elsewhere?
• "in the selection of Jon Lilygreen and" → "in the selection of Lilygreen and"
• Change on February 7 2010 to merely in February 2010 since the full date is not notable here for a selection contest
• "Cyprus placed tenth" → "Cyprus placed 10th" per MOS:NUM
• "and placed twenty-first out" → "and placed 21st out"

Background

• "twenty-seven times since" → "27 times since" per MOS:NUM
• "which it achieved three times:" → "achieving this three times:"
• Remove commas around Cyprus Broadcasting Corporation (CyBC)
• "at the 2010 Eurovision Song Contest" → "at the Eurovision Song Contest 2010" with the wikilink
• Not all of the various methods are sourced
• Remove "compete at Eurovision" from the end of the sentence because this is implied

Before Eurovision

Eurovision 2010: Epilogi tis kypriakis symmetochis

• None of the info appears to be sourced by [4], unless there is an archive mentioning this?
• Remove comma after received submissions
• The 1996, 2002 and 2005 participations are not sourced, nor is Mike Connaris' involvement
• "broadcast on RIK 1, RIK Sat as well as in Greece on ET1 and online" → "broadcast on RIK 1, RIK Sat and in Greece on ERT1 as well as online" but the website part is not sourced
• "The song received the" → "The entry received the"
• Remove overly obvious wikilink on Wales, though this fact itself is a nice addition!

Promotion

• "Jon Lilygreen and the Islanders made" → "Lilygreen and the Islanders made"
• "On 12 March, Jon Lilygreen and" → "On 12 March 2010, Lilygreen and" per this being a new sub-section
• Remove overly obvious wikilink on Netherlands
• Pipe Marga Bult to Marcha

At Eurovision

• Wikilink Jon Lilygreen on the img text
• Remove wikilink on RIK 1, also not all of those broadcasters are sourced

Performances

• "Jon Lilygreen during a rehearsal" → "Lilygreen during a rehearsal" on the img text
• "Jon Lilygreen and the Islanders took part in technical rehearsals on 19 and 23 May," → "Lilygreen and the Islanders took part in technical rehearsals on 19 and 23 May 2010,"
• "The Cypriot performance featured Jon Lilygreen" → "The Cypriot performance featured Lilygreen"
• "It was later revealed that Cyprus placed tenth" → "The country placed 10th" per MOS:NUM, also this is from the same source as the previous sentence
• "the ten qualifying countries." → "the 10 qualifying countries."
• "Jon Lilygreen and the Islanders once again" → "Lilygreen and the Islanders once again"
• "on 28 and 29 May before" → "on 28 and 29 May 2010 before"
• "of their semi-final performance" → "of their semi-final position"
• "Cyprus finished in twenty-first place" → "Cyprus finished in 21st place"

Voting

• "the country they represent." → "the country each represented."
• "Cyprus scored 57 points." → "the nation scored 57 points."
• "who announced the Cypriot votes" → "who announced their votes"
• 37 is the ref that backs up the voting info, so should be invoked after that as well as the last sentence of the para
• "and awarded by Cyprus in" → "and awarded by the nation in"

Points awarded to Cyprus

• Good

Points awarded by Cyprus

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks fantastic at 11.5%!!!
• Cite Wiwibloggs as publisher instead on ref 1
• Cite ESCToday as publisher instead on refs 4, 6, 7, 8, 9, 11, 16, 17, 21, 23 and 34
• WP:OVERLINK of European Broadcasting Union on refs 12, 18, 19, 20, 22, 24, 27, 28, 29, 30, 31, 32, 33, 35, 36, 37, 38 and 39
• WP:OVERLINK of Cyprus Broadcasting Corporation on ref 25
• Cite EuroVisionary as publisher instead on ref 26

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; nice work on this though! --K. Peake 16:16, 18 June 2022 (UTC)

  @Kyle Peake: Thanks for another detailed review! I've made the changes you've requested, though could you please clarify this comment: "of their semi-final performance" → "of their semi-final position"? Grk1011 (talk) 14:25, 20 June 2022 (UTC)

  Grk1011 When I click on the source, the only thing identical about the two separate occasions is the position they performed from. --K. Peake 15:01, 20 June 2022 (UTC)

  @Kyle Peake: I didn't see that in the ref either, so I just reworded it. Let me know if any other issues remain! Grk1011 (talk) 18:58, 20 June 2022 (UTC)

  ✓ Pass now, nice job on this! --K. Peake 07:29, 21 June 2022 (UTC)