Talk:Cardiff City F.C. 2–1 Leeds United F.C. (2002)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 12:49, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I saw this in the queue, got interested and read the whole thing. I shouldn't really review the most recent nomination, but there we go! Full review to follow shortly. Harrias ^talk 12:49, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, this is basically of GA quality: I could make a couple of minor copy-edits and pass this without feeling at all guilty. The points I'm making are all pretty minor, and probably more FA-level issues, rather than ones necessary for GA.

Referencing

Why do you list "FourFourTwo" as a publisher, not a work: surely given that it is part of the "Future plc" publishing group, it should be the latter?
RTE should be RTÉ.
Provide an author link to Jonathan Liew.
Should "Leeds Live" and "Teesside Live" be treated in the same way as WalesOnline? Ie, as a work with a publisher. (Also, spelling correction needed for "Teesside Live".)
In ref #29, provide an author link to Henry Winter, and change to The Daily Telegraph to match our article and previous reference.
Ref #33, "Hammam attacks 'aggressive' O'leary" The "L" in O'Leary needs capitalising.
Ref #35, another author link.
Ideally, I'd like to see the works linked, but no biggie.
Addressed all of the points in this section. Kosack (talk) 12:09, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Images

The image is appropriately licensed and captioned.
I'm not keen on the way that the image forces the match details template down, leaving blank space. Maybe just more the image further up in the summary section?
One of the downsides of mobile editing is that pages appear rather differently than they would on a computer screen. I've moved it further up, let me know if that doesn't fix the issue. Kosack (talk) 12:09, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Miscellaneous

Per WP:NAVBOX, all three navigation boxes should either link to this article, or not be included.
Add a WP:Short description.
I dislike the use of flags without country names in contravention of MOS:FLAG, but WP:FOOTBALL seems disinclined to become more accessible by using {{flagathlete}}.

Prose

Per MOS:CURRENCY, "million" should be spelt out on first use; "..first signing midfielder Graham Kavanagh from Stoke City for £1m before signing.." The MOS also says "and (optionally) abbreviated M or bn (both unspaced) thereafter". Which should suggest it should be "..for a further £1.75 M." But that looks weird to me. - Done
Link or explain "non-league".
"..with Welsh Rugby Union chairman Glanmor Griffiths making.." Avoid noun plus -ing. - Done
"Chairman Hammam had.." Avoid giving Hammam a false title here. - Done
"Cardiff manager Cork was.." Same again. - Done
"Fullback Dean Gordon had.." And again. (There are more after this in the match summary, but I'm not going to keep noting them.)
Done that one and I think I took care of anymore. Kosack (talk) 12:22, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"..with Frazer Richardson replacing.." Avoid noun plus -ing. - Done
"Prior to the game, John Charles, who played for both sides during his career was presented.." Add another comma after "career". - Done
"..with Cardiff quickly attacking.." and shortly after "..with Robert Earnshaw making.." Avoid noun plus -ing. - Done
"One match report commented that the pair "barely acknowledged each other" during the rest of the game.." Whose match report? Tell us inline.
The Telegraph report itself only lists a match report and doesn't name the actual writer. Kosack (talk) 12:22, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"..fouled Andy Legg 22-yards from.." No need for the hyphenation here. - Done
"..passed the stand containingeeds' supporters.." Typo. - Done
"The Daily Telegraph described the result as "one of the greatest upsets in FA Cup history".." Consider name checking Henry Winter inline here. - Done
"They lost their next match 2–1 to Peterborough United in the Second Division six days later before being eliminated from the FA Cup in the fourth round at the end January following a 3–1 defeat to Tranmere Rovers." This needs some commas to break it up. - Done
"Leeds form also slumped.." Add the possessive apostrophe; "Leeds' form.." - Done
"..which was extended to five due after he received his.." Too many words here. - Done

There you go. Lots of little points, but as I say, overall a really nice article, well done. Harrias ^talk 13:29, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Harrias: Thanks for the review. I've had this on my radar for a while (one of those, "I was there!" moments) and finally got around to writing it. I think I've addressed all of the points above. Let me know if you find anything else. Kosack (talk) 12:28, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Nice work, I'm happy to pass this now. Harrias ^talk 13:59, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]