Talk:Absolutely Sweet Marie/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:36, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will get on with this now! --K. Peake 08:36, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Change Columbia Studio B to Columbia B in the infobox per the rules on the studio parameter
"of the double album Blonde on Blonde, Dylan's seventh studio album, on June 20, 1966." → "of the double album and Dylan's seventh studio album, Blonde on Blonde (1966)." or something similar since the exact release date of the album is not notable
Move the recording sentence to being the one after writing/production; follow it with the interpretation one
Move the later inclusion to being after the total number of performances in the second para, followed finally by the cover version
""Absolutely Sweet Marie" was recorded at" → "It was recorded at"
"Rolling Stone placed the track" → "Rolling Stone placed it" with the wikilink

All done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:09, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Background and recording

You need to add Robbie Robertson's guitar playing to prose to warrant keeping the image

Used the Kooper image here instead, with some commentary. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Merge the first and second paras per the overly short size

Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Where is the November 30 session sourced?

Added Bjorner for 1965. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Add a comma after Al Kooper
"session musicians including" → "session musicians, including"
"Wayne Moss and Kenneth Buttrey," → "Wayne Moss, and Kenneth Buttrey," with the pipe
"initially on February 14." → "initially on February 14, 1966."
"during the tenth album session," → "during the 10th album session," per MOS:NUM
"which was released on June 20, 1966." → "on June 20, 1966." because included was already used
Move the last para of this section to being in comp instead since that is what it focuses on
"makes the track work."" → "makes the track work"." per MOS:QUOTE

Amended per the eight points above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Composition and lyrical interpretation

Add the last para from the previous section at the start here; the instrumentation also should be mentioned in this section
"that line does not appear" → "the line does not appear"
"Journalist Paul Williams considered that" → "Journalist Paul Williams considers that"
[8] should solely be invoked at the end of the sentence
"and named "Absolutely Sweet Marie"" → "and names "Absolutely Sweet Marie""
"fear of being misunderstood)."" → ""fear of being misunderstood)"." per MOS:QUOTE
"from first to last."" → "from first to last"." per above
Shouldn't you use the title rather than "Dylan's song"?
"half sick/traffic" why is there a single quote mark to end this part but not one to start it?
"out of key chord."" → "out of key chord"."

Amended the article per the above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:14, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

You should use a consistent past or present tense for the reviews here
"highly distinctive rhythm."" → "highly distinctive rhythm"." per MOS:QUOTE
"still felicitously possible."" → "still felicitously possible"." per above
"The reviewer for" → "A reviewer for"
"sparkling blues-rock guitar."" → "sparkling blues-rock guitar"."
"Dylan said of the song" → "Dylan said of the song:"

Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:27, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances and other releases

Looks good!

Personnel

Remove the img per MOS:IMAGERELEVANCE, especially when you have already used an image of another performer from this section
Pipe Kenneth Buttrey to Kenny Buttrey

Done. I've changed the source, and the credits per that source. Sanders (2020) seems to be the best available. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:00, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

References

Copyvio score looks decent at 39.8%
Pipe Vanity Fair to Vanity Fair (magazine) on ref 7
Add the work/website to ref 9
Pipe Harper's to Harper's Magazine on ref 21
Remove Downbeat from ref 22 and pipe Sun-Herald to The Sydney Morning Herald
Wikilink Rolling Stone on ref 26
Wikilink Bowling Green State University Popular Press
Pipe Carlton to Welbeck Publishing Group
Wikilink Continuum International Publishing Group
Wikilink Princeton University Press
Wikilink Constable & Robinson
Pipe Black Dog & Leventhal to Black Dog & Leventhal Publishers
Pipe Bloomsbury Academic to Bloomsbury Publishing
Wikilink New English Library
Wikilink University of Illinois Press
Wikilink Billboard Books per MOS:LINK2SECT
Pop Matters → PopMatters with the wikilink
Wikilink Omnibus Press

All done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:24, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

External links

Looks good!

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of the issues are fixed, after a quick review! --K. Peake 09:42, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks, K. Peake. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:18, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

BennyOnTheLoose You have not added the instrumentation from personnel to prose like I was intending you to do with the suggestion. --K. Peake 21:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Apologies, K. Peake. I've now added that in. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:13, 29 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

✓ Pass now, this is laid out well after all! --K. Peake 11:37, 29 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]