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===[[1877 Wimbledon Championship]]===
===[[1877 Wimbledon Championship]]===



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Good to go now, I think. [[User:Brianboulton|Brianboulton]] ([[User talk:Brianboulton|talk]]) 08:49, 1 June 2015 (UTC)
Good to go now, I think. [[User:Brianboulton|Brianboulton]] ([[User talk:Brianboulton|talk]]) 08:49, 1 June 2015 (UTC)
:: {{u|Brianboulton}}, thanks for your helpful comments and earlier help at the peer review.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 14:14, 3 June 2015 (UTC)


=====Crisco comments=====
====Crisco comments====
*Per [[WP:BOLDTITLE]], we shouldn't link Wimbledon Championship in the bolded text.
*Per [[WP:BOLDTITLE]], we shouldn't link Wimbledon Championship in the bolded text.
:: Done. --[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 15:40, 1 June 2015 (UTC)
:: Done. --[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 15:40, 1 June 2015 (UTC)
*Perhaps link lawn tennis because the term doesn't have much common currency now?
*Perhaps link lawn tennis because the term doesn't have much common currency now?
:: Not sure, such a link would redirect to the [[tennis]] article. Would that not confuse?--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 19:58, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
::*Not particularly; "lawn tennis" is mentioned in bold in the "tennis" article, and explained there.&nbsp;—&nbsp;[[User:Crisco 1492|Chris Woodrich]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 23:39, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*A set of rules was drawn up for the tournament, derived from the first standardised rules of tennis issued in May 1875 by the [[Marylebone Cricket Club]], the governing body for [[Rackets (sport)|rackets]] and [[real tennis]]. - Is this too much detail for the lead? I'd just go "A set of rules was drawn up for the tournament, derived from the first standardised rules of tennis issued by the [[Marylebone Cricket Club]] in May 1875"
*A set of rules was drawn up for the tournament, derived from the first standardised rules of tennis issued in May 1875 by the [[Marylebone Cricket Club]], the governing body for [[Rackets (sport)|rackets]] and [[real tennis]]. - Is this too much detail for the lead? I'd just go "A set of rules was drawn up for the tournament, derived from the first standardised rules of tennis issued by the [[Marylebone Cricket Club]] in May 1875"
:: I'm fine with removing "the governing body for [[Rackets (sport)|rackets]] and [[real tennis]]" from the lede as the necessary explanation can be found in the body text.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 18:41, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*Monday, 9 July 1877, and the final, delayed for three days by rain, was played on Thursday, 19 July, - Having the days strikes me as too much detail, particularly for the lead. I could have sworn there was something in the MOS that was against it, but I can't find it.
*Monday, 9 July 1877, and the final, delayed for three days by rain, was played on Thursday, 19 July, - Having the days strikes me as too much detail, particularly for the lead. I could have sworn there was something in the MOS that was against it, but I can't find it.
:: I prefer to keep them in the body text as they give the readers a better feel for the progress of the tournament in time. I have removed them from the lede.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 20:39, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*The winner's prize money was 12 guineas, and he received a silver challenge cup, valued at 25 guineas, donated by the sports magazine ''[[The Field (magazine)|The Field]]''. - Perhaps "The winner received 12 guineas in prize money and a silver challenge cup, valued at 25 guineas, donated by the sports magazine ''[[The Field (magazine)|The Field]]''."
*The winner's prize money was 12 guineas, and he received a silver challenge cup, valued at 25 guineas, donated by the sports magazine ''[[The Field (magazine)|The Field]]''. - Perhaps "The winner received 12 guineas in prize money and a silver challenge cup, valued at 25 guineas, donated by the sports magazine ''[[The Field (magazine)|The Field]]''."
:: That's indeed a bit more fluent. Rephrased.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 15:45, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*The service was made from a single side in a [[lozenge]] shaped box situated in the middle of the court and the service - could we avoid repeating "Service"?
*The service was made from a single side in a [[lozenge]] shaped box situated in the middle of the court and the service - could we avoid repeating "Service"?
:: Yes, we could. Done.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 15:53, 1 June 2015 (UTC)
:: Yes, we could. Done.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 15:53, 1 June 2015 (UTC)
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:: Reference to badminton removed.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 11:23, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
:: Reference to badminton removed.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 11:23, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*were handed over to lawn tennis to address the increase in new tennis members. - repetition of tennis
*were handed over to lawn tennis to address the increase in new tennis members. - repetition of tennis
:: Fixed, changed to "were handed over to lawn tennis to address the increase in new members." --[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 20:45, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*On 3 March 1875 the [[Marylebone Cricket Club]] (MCC), in its capacity as the governing body for [[Rackets (sport)|rackets]] and [[real tennis]], convened a meeting at [[Lord's Cricket Ground]] to test the various versions of lawn tennis that had been developed with the aim to standardise the game's rules - perhaps this should be split
*On 3 March 1875 the [[Marylebone Cricket Club]] (MCC), in its capacity as the governing body for [[Rackets (sport)|rackets]] and [[real tennis]], convened a meeting at [[Lord's Cricket Ground]] to test the various versions of lawn tennis that had been developed with the aim to standardise the game's rules - perhaps this should be split
:: Made it more concise by removing "that had been developed", think it reads ok now.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 19:53, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*Why are the names of different court styles italicized?
*Why are the names of different court styles italicized?
:: You mean ''Sphairistikè'', ''Germains Lawn Tennis'' and ''Pelota''?--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 18:43, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
::*Right. [[WP:ITALICS]] doesn't deal with such a case, so I'm wondering if it's standard in tennis writing.&nbsp;—&nbsp;[[User:Crisco 1492|Chris Woodrich]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 23:39, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
:::: ''Sphairistikè'' and ''Pelota'' are in italics as they are foreign names, per [[MOS:FOREIGN]], the same reason '' jeu de paume'' and '' longue paume'' are in italics. Germains Lawn Tennis is not a foreign name so its italics have been removed.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 00:29, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
*On 2 June 1877, at the suggestion of the club secretary and founding member [[John Henry Walsh|John H. Walsh]], the club committee - which club? Prince Club? MCC? Those were the two in the last paragraph
*On 2 June 1877, at the suggestion of the club secretary and founding member [[John Henry Walsh|John H. Walsh]], the club committee - which club? Prince Club? MCC? Those were the two in the last paragraph
:: Clarified. --[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 19:18, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*Standardize whether or not you convert measurements
*Standardize whether or not you convert measurements
:: Yes, conversions should be used consistently. Have added two which were missing. Any others? --[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 16:08, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*All matches during the tournament were played as best-of-five sets - So what does it mean by The first player to win six games wins the [[Tennis score#Set score|set]]?
*All matches during the tournament were played as best-of-five sets - So what does it mean by The first player to win six games wins the [[Tennis score#Set score|set]]?
:: That is standard tennis terminology. Tennis scoring is made up of the cascading units: point < game < set < match. If you win six games (with a difference of two) you win a set. A match is won either by winning two sets (best-of-three) or three sets (best-of-five).--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 12:01, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
::*Alright, thanks.&nbsp;—&nbsp;[[User:Crisco 1492|Chris Woodrich]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 12:13, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*while the rackets used were an adaptation of those used in real tennis, with a small and slightly lopsided head. - Are these the racquets the players brought themselves?
*while the rackets used were an adaptation of those used in real tennis, with a small and slightly lopsided head. - Are these the racquets the players brought themselves?
:: Yes.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 20:49, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*The ball-boys kept the tennis balls in canvas wells and during the tournament 180 balls were used - "And" doesn't work with me here.
*The ball-boys kept the tennis balls in canvas wells and during the tournament 180 balls were used - "And" doesn't work with me here.
:: Rephrased.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 19:24, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*(6 x 4 inches) - Is this the size of the card before or after it was folded?
*(6 x 4 inches) - Is this the size of the card before or after it was folded?
:: After, clarified.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 11:35, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
:: After, clarified.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 11:35, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*Marshall won the toss and elected to serve first and was immediately broken by Gore. - too many ands
*Marshall won the toss and elected to serve first and was immediately broken by Gore. - too many ands
:: Fixed.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 17:36, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*The tournament made a profit of £10. - Why is this its own paragraph?
*The tournament made a profit of £10. - Why is this its own paragraph?
:: Mainly because it doesn't fit well with the preceding paragraphs. Have now moved the sentence to a more logical location (Aftermath) where it is part of a paragraph.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 11:51, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*Heathcote said that Gore was the best player of the year and had a varied service with a lot of twist on it. He stated that Gore was a player with an aptitude for many games and had a long reach and a strong and flexible wrist. - structure is repetitive.
*Heathcote said that Gore was the best player of the year and had a varied service with a lot of twist on it. He stated that Gore was a player with an aptitude for many games and had a long reach and a strong and flexible wrist. - structure is repetitive.
:: Rephrased the second sentence to "Gore, according to Heathcote, was a player with ...". Better? --[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 20:55, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*Standardize: emdash or endash
*Standardize: emdash or endash
:: Have changed one emdash into an endash. There is another instance of emdash, not done by me, and I believe its usage is correct per [[Dash#Em_dash|Dash]] (See: Parentheses-like use).--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 15:57, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
::*The WP:DASH portion of MOS says that either or should be used ("either unspaced em dashes or spaced en dashes consistently in an article") so that one should also be a spaced endash.&nbsp;—&nbsp;[[User:Crisco 1492|Chris Woodrich]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 23:39, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
:::: It's now all endash.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 23:57, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*Did the club get their pony roller?
*Did the club get their pony roller?
:: The money was not for the purchase of a new pony roller but for the repair of the existing one. There is no specific mention in sources of it being repaired but a sentence that it remained in use has been added (with reference).--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 15:24, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
::*Right; was missing a word. Looks good.&nbsp;—&nbsp;[[User:Crisco 1492|Chris Woodrich]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 15:35, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
*You're not citing Barrett, John (2010). The Original Rules of Tennis.
*You're not citing Barrett, John (2010). The Original Rules of Tennis.
:: I have that book(let) and it would indeed have been a logical source. I will check to see if it can be used but the article already seems sufficiently referenced as it is so it may not be needed (anymore).--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 00:54, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
*Lots of duplicate links. Keep an eye out for them.
*Lots of duplicate links. Keep an eye out for them.
:: I tend to be lenient on the amount of links and don't mind a repeat link if they are far enough apart but this should be no more than one per H1 section.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 01:09, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
*Also, random comment: standardize whether or not you capitalize the titles of books in the references.&nbsp;—&nbsp;[[User:Crisco 1492|Chris Woodrich]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 15:31, 1 June 2015 (UTC)
*Also, random comment: standardize whether or not you capitalize the titles of books in the references.&nbsp;—&nbsp;[[User:Crisco 1492|Chris Woodrich]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 15:31, 1 June 2015 (UTC)
:: They should all be in sentence case.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 00:50, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
:::: Correction, that should be title case.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 22:42, 4 June 2015 (UTC)
::: {{u|Crisco 1492}}, I believe all your comments have now been addressed or at least answered. Let me know if any need follow-up. Thanks for the review! --[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 01:12, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
:::*I'd still recommend trimming some duplicate links; we've got the link to the 1878 competition mere lines from each other, for instance. Also, if Barrett's 2010 booklet isn't cited, you could include it as further reading.&nbsp;—&nbsp;[[User:Crisco 1492|Chris Woodrich]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 02:20, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
::::: Have removed three further duplicate wikilinks. That should cover it.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 12:06, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
::::: {{u|Crisco 1492}}, have added a couple citations using Barrett (2010).--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 13:27, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

*'''Support''' on prose and images. Good work!&nbsp;—&nbsp;[[User:Crisco 1492|Chris Woodrich]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 14:46, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
:: {{u|Crisco 1492}}, thanks! --[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 15:40, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

====Sources review====
*Ref 1: requires retrieval date
*Ref 9: as you are citing the Telegraph website, not the printed source, this also requires a retrieval date
*Ref 15: requires retrieval date
*Ref 32: "Sons" should be capitalised
*Ref 53: requires retrieval date
*Ref 59: ditto
*Ref 71: ditto
*Ref 77: year?
*Ref 79: requires retrieval date
*Ref 93: ditto

Otherwise, sources appear to be of appropriate quality and reliability, and are properly and consistently formatted. [[User:Brianboulton|Brianboulton]] ([[User talk:Brianboulton|talk]]) 20:01, 5 June 2015 (UTC)
:{{u|Brianboulton}}, all done. Thanks.--[[User:Wolbo|Wolbo]] ([[User talk:Wolbo|talk]]) 22:04, 5 June 2015 (UTC)

'''Spotchecks''': I have checked a large sample of the accessible sources, and found no issues of close paraphrasing. The cited text appears accurately to reflect these sources throughout the sample. [[User:Brianboulton|Brianboulton]] ([[User talk:Brianboulton|talk]]) 10:39, 13 June 2015 (UTC)

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